Wednesday, January 11, 2012

Editing required

Found online: London is not opposed to using Watford again in 2012 in certain sets to utilize the athletic ability that the native of Hampton possesses.

London likely will play Watford again in 2012 in certain sets to take advantage of his athletic ability.

The original sentence is awkward, and I'm not sure you need to mention his hometown here.

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