Wednesday, September 3, 2014

Word placement

FOUND ONLINE: A veteran Salem car dealer facing fallout from recent criminal convictions has sold his dealership.

Let's try again with one word added:

A veteran Salem car dealer has sold his dealership after facing fallout from recent criminal convictions.

"Has sold his dealership" is almost lost the first time around.

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