Saturday, April 16, 2016

A seasoned GOP operative

FOUND ONLINE: He fired Rick Wiley as national political director, a seasoned GOP operative who was a key liaison to the Republican National Committee, reportedly after clashes with Campaign Manager Corey Lewandowski.

The writer split up "Rick Wiley" and "a season GOP operative." Let's do a slight rewrite to get both things together.

He fired his national political director, Rick Wiley, a seasoned GOP operative who was a key liaison to the Republican National Committee, reportedly after clashes with Campaign Manager Corey Lewandowski.

I might also consider splitting that run-on sentence into two sentences.

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