After a stellar career

FOUND ONLINE: After a stellar career at the University of Tennessee, the Redskins thought enough of Shuler as a potential franchise quarterback that the team spent the No. 4 overall pick on him. 

The way this is written, it looks like the Redskins had a stellar career at Tennessee. We need Shuler's name up front. We also can shorten and tighten the end of the sentence.

After Shuler's stellar career at the University of Tennessee, the Redskins thought enough of him as a potential franchise quarterback that they picked him fourth overall.

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