The wrong person

FOUND ONLINE: I think GQ did a fascinating profile of Hope Hicks, the 27-year-daughter of former NFL PR exec Paul Hicks, who is the accidental press secretary for presumptive Republican presidential nominee Donald Trump.

This sentence makes it look like Paul Hicks is working for Trump. Obviously, Hope Hicks works for Trump. You'd be better off breaking this into two sentences and just say that Hope Hicks is the daughter of former NFL PR exec Paul Hicks.

FROM A QUOTE FOUND ONLINE: "There will be less returns.”

Actually, there will be fewer kickoff returns. 

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