"The crests of the mighty clouds were glorious with sunlight, but the flat undersides were sullen with impending rain."
It's a simple enough sentence, but I can easily see the glorious topside and the sullen underside of the clouds. Always give the reader something he can see, touch, taste, hear or feel.
By the way, Louis L'Amour didn't "invent" Hopalong Cassidy. Clarence Mulford did. L'Amour wrote four Hoppy books early in his career as he was transitioning from short stories to novels.
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