Sunday, September 30, 2012

Running into foul ground

Found online: With a runner on first and one out in the fourth, Cody Ross hit a sharp grounder down the third-base line that Machado backhanded and threw to second while running into foul ground to start an inning-ending 5-4-3 double play.

"While running into foul ground" is lost in the shuffle here. I'd make it two sentences and do a bit of rearranging:

With a runner on first and one out in the fourth, Cody Ross hit a sharp grounder down the third-base line. Machado ran into foul ground, backhanded the ball and threw to second to start an inning-ending 5-4-3 double play.



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