FOUND ONLINE: Benkert said he’s excited to get started and looking forward to Virginia, which was picked last in the ACC’s Coastal Division, exceeding expectations.
That's an odd construction, and I had to read it twice to figure it out. Being picked last in the Coastal Division and exceeding expectations didn't seem to go together. Let's move a part of it to the front.
Virginia was picked last in the ACC’s Coastal Division, but Benkert said he’s excited to get started and looks forward to exceeding expectations.
I also changed looking to looks. It just reads better.
HEADLINE FOUND ONLINE: Donald Trump Just Helped Ted Cruz Bigly
Bigly? Bigly? Is that a verb? Is it a person?
Actually, it's an archaic word that Donald Trump used in a speech. “We’re not going to lose, we are going to start winning again and we’re going to win bigly.”
I can't imagine using bigly in a sentence (although I just did). And I hate the way the writer punctuated that sentence.
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