Thursday, September 1, 2016

Brought in through the draft

FOUND ONLINE: The team brought in the athletic Su'a Cravens through the draft to complement Will Compton and Mason Foster at linebacker...

Why not just say that the team drafted Su'a Cravens?

The team drafted the athletic Su'a Cravens to complement Will Compton and Mason Foster at linebacker...

If you're wondering about the three dots, I cut the rest of the long sentence. It had no purpose here.

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