There's nothing dramatically wrong here, but it could be improved. The first sentence could be tightened, and the second one could be melted into the first. Some people consider that a run-on sentence; to me, it's tight writing on deadline.
The third sentence? I'd like to know what Jesse Palmer's worse performance was.
Osweiler completed 22 of his 41 passes for 131 yards, the second-fewest passing yards ever with 40 or more attempts. Only Jesse Palmer had a worse performance back in 2003.
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