Carroll has been a coach

FOUND ONLINE: Carroll has been a coach who placed a high value on loyalty and he has been reluctant to make changes to his staff in the form of firing assistants.

This story is just too wordy. Let's try again:

Carroll has placed a high value on loyalty and has been reluctant to fire his assistants.

ALSO FOUND ONLINE: Truth be told – Landry might never dawn the aqua and teal anymore.

What was the writer thinking? I hope he meant don, not dawn.

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Which shot 51 percent from the floor

FOUND ONLINE: Also scoring in double figures for UVA, which shot 51 percent from the floor, were Jerome (13) and Johnson (12).

The writer has divided up the sentence here (Also scoring in double figures for UVA were Jerome and Johnson).

He might have said this: UVA, which shot 51 percent from the floor, also got double-figure scoring from Jerome (13) and Johnson (12).

EMAIL: tgilli52@gmail.com  TWITTER: EDITORatWORK

More blog entries by Tom Gillispie

• Resume for a writer and editor

• An editor's views on powerful writing

• Advice for be and would-be novelists

• Links to TG's stories online

• Favorite quotes

• What I do when I'm editing

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• Watching TV

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• Wipeout at Death Valley

• Days with rainbows

• A desperate writer working in the dark

• Yer outta there!

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• You really DO need an editor

• Reminders for would-be novelists

• What I do when I'm editing

• What I charge (it's a deal) and what I edit

• Slogging through the Internet

• J-school: More eyes on your stories

• J-school: Go out and learn

• Rookie mistakes for magazine writers

Entries from The Dog Blog

• Katie cried

• Growl and pull

• ... said the spider to ...

• The Dog Diary (2015)

• The Dog Diary (2014)

• 13-plus years with my dog Lady

• OOH! OOH! The stereophonic huskies

• What Lady and Michael Jackson had in common

Blog entries from The Auto Racing Journal

• Angel in Black: Remembering Dale Earnhardt Sr.

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• Then Junior Said to Jeff...

(the book of great NASCAR stories)

• My best day as a sports writer

• Jeff Gordon's milk toast to Dale Earnhardt

•Wayne Auton: A life in racing