This sentence isn't bad, but I thought I'd give you something to think about. A tighter way to say is:
They played their most complete game against Houston, in the opener, and they have turned in scattered football ever since.
In fiction, people often say that someone is a man who talks too much. Why not just say that he talks too much?
Links: On my web site, I have links to some of my stories online.
Editorial group: If you're a writer, editor or general freelancer, you might check out my Freelance Writers and Editors group on Yahoo! We've been really active lately, and I think we've become useful to each other.
Writers' guidelines: If you want to write for magazines (or book publishers), check out the writers' guidelines on my Freelance Writers and Editors group on Yahoo!
Followers: Welcome to all the followers on this blog. May the Force be with you.
Check it out: You might look at Funds for Writers, which specializes in grants for writers.
Contact: Reach me at tgilli52@gmail.com or nc3022@yahoo.com.
Other EDITOR@WORK blog entries
Entries from The Dog Blog
(a book of great stories about the Intimidator)
(the book of great NASCAR stories)
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