I ADMIRE GOOD and clever headlines, but I wonder about Big storm means blizzness. I assume it's a combination of bizness and blizzard, but I think it's a miss more than a hit.
WRITERS OFTEN TRY TOO hard to get everything into a lead, and they throw the kitchen sink at the reader. Check this out:
While the bulk of attention after the New Orleans Saints’ Super Bowl victory over the Indianapolis Colts focused on quarterback Drew Brees and cornerback Tracy Porter — two Saints with improbable journeys whose career performances came in the most important game either had ever played — the path of Sean Payton was just as, if not more, unlikely.
WRITERS OFTEN TRY TOO hard to get everything into a lead, and they throw the kitchen sink at the reader. Check this out:
While the bulk of attention after the New Orleans Saints’ Super Bowl victory over the Indianapolis Colts focused on quarterback Drew Brees and cornerback Tracy Porter — two Saints with improbable journeys whose career performances came in the most important game either had ever played — the path of Sean Payton was just as, if not more, unlikely.
I admire the effort, but that lead is 57 words long; way too many.
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