Sunday, April 29, 2012

Nope, sorry

Found online: Talawanda High School inducted eight of their most talented past athletics into their Hall of Fame Thursday, Oct. 21, with dinner and an induction ceremony.

This writer — and his editor — weren't very careful. I'd make three changes, with "their" becoming its and "athletics" becoming athletes, and I'd make it "on Thursday."

Talawanda High School inducted eight of its most talented past athletes into its Hall of Fame on Thursday, Oct. 21, with dinner and an induction ceremony.

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