Found online: Talawanda High School inducted eight of their most talented past
athletics into their Hall of Fame Thursday, Oct. 21, with dinner and an
induction ceremony.
This writer — and his editor — weren't very careful. I'd make three changes, with "their" becoming its and "athletics" becoming athletes, and I'd make it "on Thursday."
Talawanda High School inducted eight of its most talented past
athletes into its Hall of Fame on Thursday, Oct. 21, with dinner and an
induction ceremony.
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