Tuesday, December 29, 2009

A more emphatic way to say it

POSSIBLE EDIT: “He wants the same things I do,” Holmgren said. “We want the team to be better, we want to win, we want the fans to feel good, we’re going after the same thing.”

Most editors would leave this as it is. But there's a more emphatic way to say it.

“He wants the same things I do,” Holmgren said. “We want the team to be better; we want to win; we want the fans to feel good.

"We’re going after the same thing.”


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2 comments:

  1. All power to you, Tom. Happy New Year.

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  2. Thanks, Valance. Same to you. Tom

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