Not the way to do it

THIS WAS A CHILDISH way to write a story on an 11-year-old boy who was interviewing players at the NFL Pro Bowl.

Weaver said he was most excited to interview his favorite player, Philadelphia Eagles quarterback Donovan McNabb.

"He's my favorite player," Weaver said.
 
You could have changed that to this: Weaver said he was excited to interview Philadelphia Eagles quarterback Donovan McNabb.

"He's my favorite player," Weaver said.
 
Why the change? It was redundant. By the way, I hope the boy didn't tell McNabb that he's his favorite player. I know from personal experience; that doesn't work.

Contact: Reach me at tgilli52@gmail.com or nc3022@yahoo.com.

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• Reminders for would-be novelists

• What I do when I'm editing

• What I charge (it's a deal) and what I edit

• Slogging through the Internet

• J-school: More eyes on your stories

• J-school: Go out and learn

• Rookie mistakes for magazine writers

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Blog entries from The Auto Racing Journal

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• My best day as a sports writer

• Jeff Gordon's milk toast to Dale Earnhardt

• Wayne Auton: A life in racing

More blog entries by Tom Gillispie

• Resume for a writer and editor

• An editor's views on powerful writing

• Advice for be and would-be novelists

• Links to TG's stories online

• Favorite quotes

• What I do when I'm editing

Anecdotes by Tom Gillispie

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• A desperate writer working in the dark

• Yer outta there!