THESE TWO PARAGRAPHS come from the same story, and, in fact, were back-to-back. Neither is totally correct.
Walter Jones – Regarded as maybe the greatest left tackle of all-time, this is a gimme.
Junior Seau – Another all-time great at his position who’s longevity of production will not go unnoticed in his first year.
Jones wasn't one of the greatest left tackles of all-time; it should be all time. Also, I'd replace the comma with a semi colon.
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