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Green – whose father, Kevin Morgan, was a running back at Virginia – played quarterback at Petersburg, where was known for his dual-threat ability. He threw for more than 2,000 yards and rushed for nearly 1,000 yards as a high school senior in 2010 and was rated a two-star recruit by Rivals.com. He also played defensive back.

The "dual-threat" aspect was repeated in the next sentence, so this might become:

Green's father, Kevin Morgan, was a running back at Virginia. Green threw for more than 2,000 yards and rushed for nearly 1,000 yards as a senior quarterback at Petersburg in 2010. Green, rated a two-star recruit by Rivals.com, also played defensive back.

We don't need to say "high-school senior," since we know he was in high school.

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