Tuesday, November 24, 2009

Editing attribution

Found online: “He was never as good as everybody said he was,” the former quarterback Trent Dilfer, now an ESPN analyst, said Monday.

I don't like splitting up attribution. This would read better as “He was never as good as everybody said he was,” said Trent Dilfer, a former quarterback and now an ESPN analyst. I took out Monday; it's not necessary.

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