Friday, July 29, 2011

Two many adjectives

This sentence has "defense" in there once and "defensive" twice.

The defense appears to be aging quickly, but defensive end Jared Allen and defensive tackle Kevin Williams are among the best players in the league at their respective positions.


You don't need "defensive."


The defense appears to be aging quickly, but end Jared Allen and tackle Kevin Williams are among the best players in the league at their respective positions.



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