Friday, August 19, 2011

Subtle edit

Needs editing: In starting the past 22 games, DeMarco has thrown 44 touchdowns and 16 interceptions, and has run for 25 more scores.

 You don't throw touchdowns or interceptions; you throw touchdown passes, and the defense intercepts passes. So I'd change it this way:

 In starting the past 22 games, DeMarco has thrown 44 touchdown passes, with 16 interceptions, and has run for 25 more scores.
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2 comments:

  1. Lauren I. RuizSeptember 5, 2011 at 7:14 PM

    Hmm. Because I lack sports knowledge, I would not have been able to edit this sentence as well as you did.

    I have yet to, but if I encounter anyone who needs editing for something sports related, I'll be sure to send them to you.

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  2. Tom GillispieSeptember 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM

    Thanks, Lauren. Much appreciated. I also edit novels, non-fiction books, academic and business writing and more. Sports is my niche, but I can do much, much more.

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