Monday, February 15, 2016

We need a name in there

FOUND ONLINE: Prior to (SOMEBODY) making a qualifying attempt, NASCAR officials on pit road determined that a roof flap was not in compliance with prescribed specifications.

This makes it sound like NASCAR officials were about to try to qualify for a race. The writer needed to put a name in there.

Prior to Martin Truex Jr. making a qualifying attempt, NASCAR officials on pit road determined that a roof flap was not in compliance with prescribed specifications.

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