Monday, February 22, 2016

Paring the defensive lineman

FOUND ONLINE: Paring the defensive lineman with Ndamukong Suh would make the defensive line better and Miami could afford to move Earl Mitchell to a back-up role or even release him all together.

I assume they meant "pairing" and wrote "paring." I hope so.

Also, I'd cut out "all together." It reads the same either way.

Finally, I'd changed "the defensive line" to "the line"; you already had "defensive lineman" earlier in the sentence.

Pairing the defensive lineman with Ndamukong Suh would make the line better and Miami could afford to move Earl Mitchell to a back-up role or even release him.


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